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福利来了！智慧留学的文书老师教你手把手写托福雅思作文 3

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近期智慧留学不少签约学生还在紧锣密鼓备考托福，雅思之中，中国考生普遍阅读能力强，写作能力难以有效迅速提高。美国不少大学的专业对写作单项小分有一定要求，特别是经济，传媒，商业管理，其他人文社科。另外很多同学在冲击托福100，雅思7.5的过程中，写作严重拖后腿。语言是一个方面，另外是思路打不开，不知道写什么。智慧留学的文书团队老师都有丰富美英留学与工作经验，有的老师之前还教过GRE， SAT，GMAT，托福，雅思等高难度写作课程，在写作教学过程中大量应用原汁原味的表达方式与地道的词汇句式，帮助大量学生申请到名校。这与他们多年的阅读写作基本功积累分不开，在教学与写作任务之外，这些名师大量阅读如经济学人，纽约时报，基督教科学箴言报，时代周刊，华尔街日报之类的英美报刊，所以才能积累出深厚写作功底。

下面是一道雅思写作真题，关于教育的话题，是托福雅思， GRE写作考试中的重中之重，出现频率非常高，同学们一定要打开思路，找到足够的话题与素材进行讨论。上大学是否是成功好的道路，应该因人而异，分两种情况，综合分析讨论。想想生活中，哪些人适合读大学，哪些人不适合，然后分别讨论读大学的好处，与直接上班进入社会的好处就可以。

Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

托福雅思的大作文写作题目大同小异，都需要考生结合背景知识在限定时间写出一篇300-450字文章。雅思对文章长度要求低一点，托福稍高。智慧留学的老师之前与评分的英美考官沟通过，他们原话是，your final score is in linear correlation with the length of your writing。也就是写的越长，分数越高，除非都是无意义车轱辘话，评分老师不能欺负勤奋能写的人是吧。另外他们也提到，有些机考考试评分是软件自动评分参与（如GRE， GMAT，托福），要看“三长”，文章长，句子长，单词长，这三长是评估写作水准的指标之一。如果通篇都是baby English, 幼儿园小学生水平单词，句子肯定分数不会高。美国老师曾说， America is a verbal country, people judge you by the vocabulary you are using in your speech and writing. 那种误以为只要能表达清楚，句子，词汇简单没关系的思想，是错误的。托福雅思， SAT， GRE这些写作考试是语言与学术能力考试，要看到一定的语言把握能力与思想深度。其中托福雅思更重语言， SAT， GRE更重学术能力与思想。所有考试的评分共同点，要看到多样化，就是词汇，表达方式，句式，论证方法多样化。同样的原则，适用于留学文书的写作。这样读者看了才能耳目一新，留下一个非常独特的好印象，要么给写作高分，要么给录取与奖学金。

下面这篇文章就是智慧留学的一位老师在当年教学过程中与学生在半小时内同步在电脑中敲出来的，一共450字。学生写作水平只要达到这个水准的70%就足以在托福，雅思考试中获得好成绩。多模仿范文，多熟悉里面的词汇用法，句式，论证模块，上考场就能下笔如有神。美国教授说过， Successful imitation is the first step for the effective innovation. 成功的模仿，是有效的创新的第一步。

下面看文章，典型的总—分—总结构。保证结构完整性，不断点题，从而紧扣题目关键词，保证不跑题。这是在有限时间内写作保证高分的原则。

The pursuit of university or college level of education has become the most important goal for majority of middle and high school students. However, some people believe that it is better to obtain a job straight after school. From my perspective, this issue is highly complicated in nature and should be analyzed on a case-by-case basis. For individuals with strong analytical skills, cognitive ability, critical thinking and creative thoughts, they should pursue college study to further enrich their background for preparation of advanced careers. Otherwise, if the students are adept in craftsmanship of particular industrial sectors, they may choose to work directly after schooling.

First and foremost, many careers which require complex and systematic training in theories and case studies will require candidates with at least a college level degree, such as business executives, attorneys, medical doctors, scientific researchers, financial analysts and computer engineers. Statistics and commonsense inform us that the disparity of income between advanced degree holders and those only with high school diplomas is getting increasingly apparent. The former has almost dominated all of the high salary positions in modern society across different industries and social sectors, whereas the latter has to endure the low wages and fewer opportunities to be promoted into higher managerial positions in enterprises. Even in certain manufacturing companies which traditionally hired many physical workers without college degrees, the advancement of production methodology brought by automation and artificial intelligence has rendered physical workers to lose many positions and have to be managed by supervisors with higher education and skill set.

Nevertheless, for some middle and high school students with hardship to continue college lives, either for financial concerns or the lack of academic capabilities, it is also a workable/viable choice to find a job or get trained in vocational schools. Since pursuit of college study is costly and requires a lot of academic endeavors, it is better for them to work directly at their young ages to accumulate work experiences and money. However, it is highly recommended that they could undertake jobs not only focused on some repetitive and simple tasks so that they could at least obtain some transferable and solid expertise. Some manufacturing workers in luxury commodity production, such as luxury automobiles, bags or jewelries, do not require college degrees to excel, but their accumulation of experiences is more desirable for their success in workplace. Therefore, the decision to pursue college study or not should be analyzed on different scenarios of particular persons.

In conclusion, for young people with ambition to pursue advanced careers with highly specialized skills, college education is essential for their personal growth. Otherwise, working directly after schooling is also a feasible choice to survive in modern society.

点评，此文是教过GRE写作的美国海归老师来降维打击雅思写作，所以充满浓浓的GRE文风，难度超过一般托福雅思写作满分要求。很多学生觉得学习这样范文对提高词汇，阅读也有帮助，这是智慧留学文书团队有信心给大家拔高，低分高录的底气所在。如果你有有兴趣让智慧留学老师来帮你提高文书，应试能力，请在后台联系我们工作人员。

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